So, this is a short comic for an audition for an art contest. The character is Jill (you know, jack and jill went up the hill, etc). The darkness beasty is the Big Bad Wolf, property of the guy running the tournament, who runs an awesome webcomic named Everafter. To enter you had to draw a character encountering Big Bad. Most people went with the intimidated approach.
No speech bubbles/grayscale yet, got one more day to finish this.



I need to clean this up but I'm really afraid of inking. I'll probably have to go in and nitpick with an eraser. What's a good way to get nice clean, thin lines? I have yet to find one.
Also, any general layout crits, etc, would be great. I'll post more as I finish it off.\
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First page basically done

Only have about 1 hour to finish the rest, so I'm going to have to submit it only half done. ):
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My only complaint is she really just looks like a dude in a dress. Unless she(he) is and the dialouge clears that up?
Is my stuff really that unpopular? Maybe it's just the slew of 'LOOK AT MY COMIC LAWL' threads going around.
Oh, I didn't mean your art was bad, it's just the majority of threads that ask for comic reviews are complete crap.
I mean the lack of replies whenever I post stuff. I'll retitle this probably
That's probably because it's a lot easier to lay into iredeemable crap than it is to offer constructive advice on a well-drawn piece.
Which this is ;-) Some of the panels look a little crowded (to the point that from within the mass of lines, it's sometimes hard to see what's going on at first glance), but I imagine that'll be addressed once the piece is inked and/or coloured.
I dig the idea but I feel like you should try to get your own style not copy someone else's.
Here is a link to Hector's Dev Art for point of ref http://elsevilla.deviantart.com/
Now that I look at it I can see the resemblence... but that was completely unintentional.
I was thinking of joining this tournament thing, but I don't really have the time to do it.
I'd say the art could use some cleaning up and cleaner lines. And take more time to draw details and backgrounds.
Also: Good luck.
Seriously, where are you getting that from? I don't even really see an influence. Maybe that sometimes he draw long and lanky characters too?
Beyond that, eh, not seeing it.
No. Fail.
I'm familiar with hectors stuff and it's not a 'direct copy', not even close, you can say the designs are similar, but even then, everything borrows from something. You can't tell me Hector is 100% original. It's not uncommon for someone to emulate one of their favorite artists when they are progressing early on, and there's NOTHING wrong with that. I used to try to draw like Todd McFarlane. Not because I ever intended to be a carbon copy of him later on, but because it was what was appealing and it served as a springboard that helped me grasp and learn things easier and enjoy drawing more.
You have to try different styles, if someone has something you like, you incorporate that element into your own style. Every artist here is an amalgam of different artistic styles. We all take what appeals to us from what we've seen from others and what we gather from our observations about life.
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Lots of influences, not on this specifically, but things that I have drawn on in the past.
And yes, FLCL is awesome
Other than that, great stuff.
I thought that, too. It reminds me of the Monkey King's Rú Yì Bàng (staff), which the Monkey King could control its length and girth at will.
Though I gotta say this is some nice improvement from where you began. Just make your type legible!!!
(I can never read nothin Sin says on the battle forum :P)
I also think people need to stop claiming people are ripping off other peoples styles. It's saidso many bloody threads and is usually complete rubbish, like here.
Pennywise? I suppose the hair is different. =P
But honestly, you're right. The styles don't even look that similar, and I get sick of people crying "rip off!" I don't care how you draw, unless you invent a new style somehow, it's going to look like at least one other famous person's. There's only so many ways to represent the human form.
I can tell that the Battle Tourney has had an effect on you. You're craking out some incredible comics, and you have a style all your own. I must say though, that reading your comics and not seeing Sin in them makes me cry a little on the inside.
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Spent a long time doing that first page... too long actually, only have an hour to finish the other two ):
I agree, that's my strength (front shots) and I need to deviate from it ):
Thanks for pointing it out.
Probably because it was unfinished, and the guy making the tournament was looking for certain archetypes anyway ;_;
Perhaps for a growing intensity in the ending of this comic, you could perhaps do something with the wolves instead of showing a same more enlarged form of the same picture, if your strength is (which I can clearly see and agree) is front shot, then the next thing you start improving will be a cosistant slow moving flipping back-in fourth style of slides. the wolves are staring at her, Shes staring back angry, But then the wolves... are staring back again? So its a staredown, but perhaps a .... inbetween the staring wolves and her staring down the wolves can imply a longer well.. staring down! Then, the last part then can include something to conclude it with for instance, perhaps lunging towards the viewers. It shows more intensity to the end and keeps people wanting to see whats next.
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