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Dead China Doll
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I'm not only new to Art Forums, but I'm also really new to art. I recently found my style (took me forever), and I haven't taken art classes. But I'll share with you my most recent piece, and the commission I'm working on.
This is my best pic to date ::
This is the commission ::
My Patron wants me to draw her friend with the same thing I did for my friend Erin's picture. Lots of see creatures, lots of detail. But Erin's pic was so much easier because I KNEW the girl. It was simple for me to capture her personality. I haven't really penned much in yet because I'm wary, and I'm looking for some sharp feedback. My patron lady has some connections, and I want this thing to be mindblowingly awesome.
Suggestions please I beg of you, before I start inking more sea critters and potentially screwing stuff up. It's my first commission, so I feel like there's a lot of pressure on me to do this right.
Thank you so much guys. Harsher, the better. Compliments are nice too, so I know what to CONTINUE doing as well.
- Alz
This is my best pic to date ::
This is the commission ::
My Patron wants me to draw her friend with the same thing I did for my friend Erin's picture. Lots of see creatures, lots of detail. But Erin's pic was so much easier because I KNEW the girl. It was simple for me to capture her personality. I haven't really penned much in yet because I'm wary, and I'm looking for some sharp feedback. My patron lady has some connections, and I want this thing to be mindblowingly awesome.
Suggestions please I beg of you, before I start inking more sea critters and potentially screwing stuff up. It's my first commission, so I feel like there's a lot of pressure on me to do this right.
Thank you so much guys. Harsher, the better. Compliments are nice too, so I know what to CONTINUE doing as well.
- Alz
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That 2nd one could use some composition work though, her legs look like they've been shortened so they'll fit on the page.
In the 2nd pic, I don't know if it's intentional or not (it may be, since it's highly stylized), but some of the proportions seem a little off. Her hands and feet are a little small, and her legs don't seem right. I don't think the overall leg is more or less the right length, but I think you've got her thighs a little too long, and her calves a little too short. A general rule of thumb is that the upper leg and lower leg should both be of equal length (not counting the foot).
Other than that, her eyes are very big...but if it's supposed to be a semi-caricature, then that might very well have been your intention.
On a hopefully more useful note: The eyes are too big in the second picture, and her eyebrows a little too straight. The line between the nose and the eyebrows should be curved, but on her they're almost at right angles.
I'd tone down the detailing on her hands--they look really weird to me, honestly. And it looks like her forearm is too short compared to her upper arm. I'd throw in some thicker linework around the edges of her hair.
On the first one, I'd decrease some of the detailing on the face. You don't need *all* of those lines around her eyes, nor all of them in her eyebrows. Her nose is also too straight--it should curve a bit more--and I'd take out the leftmost shine. After all, the shines on her lip and the right side of her nose indicate a light source over that way, so why would the left side of her nose be shining?
The background is tilted--I'm not sure I've ever seen a tilted ocean...
And your hairlines are a little weak.
On the good side, your composition is strong and your linework is very nice. I love the wavy stylings of the first girl's hair and all of the cute sea creatures. ^_^
crits
-the facial anatomy most of all, it is basically what i focused on, with a rough focus on normal anatomy
-hand/foot size are off, but if you are going for that kind of look disregard this crit.
-she is sitting on her foot, but the foot is so tiny/at an odd place.
-i would say to alter the angle of the feet a little bit, but you might be going for that kind of look with most things in profile, so i'll leave that up to you.
-i would say to show both breasts, but again, if that is a stylistic choice to leave it all n profile disregard this.
i love the detail, your linework is wonderful.
Like I've said before, I haven't taken anatomy for drawing, or any other art classes. This is me going on a stylish fling until my classes start in September. But I appreciate the feedback (although it's a bit frustrating for me, since I don't understand most of the anatomy critiques)
I'll show the redone sketch later and request some feedback before I ink it (as I already made the mistake of inking the first one before.)
Feel free. I can't color worth shit
Yet. You can't color worth shit yet. It's a learning process, just like drawing, and everybody sucks at first. Having said that, it's probably better to focus on one thing at a time, and drawing should probably come before coloring.
Critique is always lovely.
Kirby.
The Dream of a Walrus
Self Portrait
I look like a crackwhore. Hah.
I hate this. I need to redo it. It's not worthy of 50. I know what I did wrong. It lacks space and flow, so the details blend more as a background than a living entity like the other pic.
At least it was good practice.
(( i love the blow fish and seals. adding those to the updated one ))
Anyone who guesses where the idea came from gets awesome points. For being awesome.
Joelle here from portland.
She has some nice stuff, not a lot of publicity or attention.
Criticism? Please? Be bashing. (Though not about the eyes. I already know I need work on the eyes, and hers are a caricature. When I do another piece, I'll be open for criticism about the eyes.)
The right hand here doesn't look too bad. The only advice I can really offer for drawing hands it to look at some real hands and use them as references.
My first moleskinne piece. This thing is useful and compact.
A flyer I drew on the back of during a friend's gig
Same as above. Was suppose to be a political cartoon with Iran being the fisher and the Shark being Guantanamo bay
I'll have something better later. I've been busy trying to find a job, but I have a few interesting character concepts that I'd like some critiquing and advice on later.
I've known him for a long time. And he's helping me with my weight-plan, so it's a tradeoff really.
Just so you know, I'm reading this and in my mind is translates to "I have the biggest crush on Tube. He is my lovey dovey squishy toy."
Baiken from Guilty Gear
A little old, but it shows what I attempt to do with color. I hate the window, but I honestly thought if I didn't put ANYTHING back there, it would look poor standalone.
Really. I need help with color pretty desperately. Should I have put more in there? I just don't know.
Also, anatomically, is that okay?
but... grifter... i would never be disloyal to the love you and I share.
we do share love, right? i mean, we could share love. sharing love involves eating raw beefheart, doesn't it? I would eat it with no one but you.
Prismacolors and some other marker type thing. I made it brighter using photoshop because I'm a sucker for bright bright bang bang colors.
And on a regular basis! :winky:
Ok, I'll talk about it later. I'm about to leave work in a few minutes and don't have time right now.
okay sugarlips, i'll be waiting with that beefheart! have fun at work, love love love.
In any case, I like the composition for the first version of the commission piece better than the second one you posted. I agree that there are some anatomy issues, but I find them pretty easy to ignore because it just looks stylized.
Prismacolors can be a bitch to color with
edit: So I'm a bored son of a bitch and decide to see what I can do for your baiken pic. GG is one of favorite fighting games(so I just had to).
I'm making the assumption that you don't want to paint the picture in photoshop. You just want to "adjust" the colors. I hope the colors turn out because everyone's monitors are different.
When balancing colors in a piece always do Layers>New Adjustment Layers. This will put your "change" in a new layer. So you can do multiple changes to a pic without screwing it up. And if you don't like a change, you can just toss the layer. I like curves(make an shallow s shaped curves) and selective color.
I used selective color which allows me to change certain colors and not others to enhance your picture.
Yellow-
+100% yellow
+100 black
Whites-
+100% yellow
What this fixed:
Baiken's skin looked the same as the white cloth. Now it doesn't.
Magentas-
-45% magenta
+17% yellow
What this fixed:
Your pinks were so saturated that you were losing depth+detail. Now your good hair linework looks better and the belt has more depth.
random comments about the piece itself:
I dyed the bottom half black so the text would be more readable. If any of my tampering with your stuff bothers you I can take the images down.
NU :: Thank you SO MUCH for the help and pointers. As for paint - I HATE using adobe. I think it has a lot to do with the fact I can't sit at a computer and color, I have to be in a public place and I feel more in tune with my piece if I'm doing it by hand and watching it develop in front of me.
Baiken is one of my favorite characters design wise and personality. I have a soft spot for samurai, and a softer spot for female samurai. I'll probably redraw her in the future with breast exposed and arm naked, but in a different pose. When I color it, I'll post it and hopefully you'll be around to critique it like this last one. I'll follow your advice in the future.
I'll probably work on it some more. I'm asking Larlar for more details. I'll scan it tomorrow (don't have a scanner, have to use the school's), clean it up and... make it pretty? I don't know. It's pretty fucked up and I got a headache just trying to draw it. Why do men have such violent imaginations?
What kind should it be?
I was thinking of the little soft red cheese with the winking happy cow on it.
I'll have access to a scanner on Tuesday and throw in a few pieces I've been toying with. Right now I'm drawing Mrs. Coulter and her evil nasty spitting monkey of horror.
I'd love to see it colored, though.