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Hey all. I had been working on the script for this in The Writers Block for a while, and now it's done and I thought I'd come in the more appropriate forum to post the finished film. It's about 5 twenty-somethings living in a college town liivin' the dream. I hope you guys like it. We worked very, very hard on it.
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Russian's kinda annoying though
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The scenes which were lit, the lighting was well done, congrats to whoever recorded sound/sound edited (it crackles in places but thats nitpicking), Ive always found dialogue heavy scenes to be a bitch when it comes to sound, but you did very well. Except that scene in the kitchin where the characters were very obviously dubbed. Framing was also well suited for the most part also.
Just make sure you don't have auto apature set on the camera, the camera tries to adjusts the brightness mid shot and it made certain parts look really amateur (e.g. @15:16). Also the shots where you change from tripod to handheld (the guy drinking the vodka esp) really didn't work, when people were moving around it was fine.
For the most part editing was good, but there are some cuts that didn't work here and there, like the end of that kitchin scene where the Russian guy takes off his chef hat. And one part later on where theres a shot of Liz and Jim on on a sofa, the shot goes from the two of them, cuts to slightly left of the two of them, then straight back to the first shot again. It was a needless cut as it showed the exact same thing just from a slightly different angle.
I know it difficult to find originality these days but jeez, watch Spaced much? The main two characters were Tim and Jessica Stevenson (can't remember her characters name). The video game guy and the female friend writer in the background setup. The guy who was insane and wrote poems was Brian, and the high pitched girl was Twist. The Resident Evil references were also done heavily in that show, the way you watched her feet running out of the bedroom etc etc it was all way too familular.
Sorry if this sounds harsh, but it needs to be said if you are to improve. You should be proud of this film and it is very clear alot of hard work went into it. The flashbacks that suddenly introduced Jim for example was very original (and the best part imo).
I'd really like to hear more about how it was made, how long it took, what was difficult in production etc etc
Also, dude, why is there a pic of Harrison Ford on the opening title sequence?
Why would there not be a pic of Harrison Ford on the opening sequence?
Edit: also I thought the script was tops man :^:
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He made a quick cameo in the flashback in the coffee shop. He's one of our friends dads and said he'd do it if he could just walk past in the background someplace.
Nah, I don't know. We thought it would be funny.
About the spaced thing, the names were Tim and Daisy. In our's it's Liz and Jim because it's the actor's real names (Liz's first name, Jim's second. Also Kate's.)
Thanks for all the help though. This was Our first big thing, and I learned a ton from it. I'm not ashamed of it, but kind'a you know? From what I learned making it, I will be able to make the next one so much better, and I wish this one would be the good. I wish that I knew what I know now, when I was younger.
Im at the first scene with the russian guy, he is fucking cool so far..
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That "I wish my life was a musical" scene was a bit of a turd. Went on too long.
But overall, I would watch this more or less regularly.
Thank you, Rubacava!
God damn right!
At the end Kate says she loves dinosaurs, if that makes that make more sense. Also, that realy is Betsy's (the girl that plays Liz) house. The guy's townhouse is Hailey (Kate) and I's house. Also, thanks alot guys for the encouraging words, guys. I'm glad some of you are digging it.
I agree about the green screen stuff. We got a little cought up in it. I love the turky joke, but it could have been about 30 sec. shorter.
"This guy from the internet who calls himself Doctor Pain says hi"
yeah that's gonna earn you big points with the ladies...
Anyway the acting was pretty good, the Russian seemed the least believable (not dirty or old enough... plus no five o-clock shadow). The line about cake favorites was definitely the funniest moment for me. Loved the turkey as well, though for her life being a musical there wasn't all that much singing. I'd be interested in seeing what would happen in a more plot based episode as opposed to the dialog based one.
Liz or Kate? What am I saying? No. I will not tell her. Quit it.
I think it was a little slow and that the actors were really trying to act way too hard, but it held my attention for the episode so good work.
Yes. But we aren't going to start filming episode two until January and then be done mid February. From there we are going to keep the every other month schedule.
I'd agree with this. Mostly a great effort, but the pacing was slow.
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