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ZUDA-The Legend of the Fool King
AlexKS
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Hi,
My comic has made it into the Zuda competition this month and I thought you guys at Artist's corner might fancy a look:
http://www.zudacomics.com/node/220
Any support would be really welcome. I'll be checking this forum for any feedback you may have.
here's some a link to the some 'Making Of' stuff:
Layouts:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/2259241...7603687958321/
Pencils:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/2259241...7603658013836/
many Thanks,
Alex
My comic has made it into the Zuda competition this month and I thought you guys at Artist's corner might fancy a look:
http://www.zudacomics.com/node/220
Any support would be really welcome. I'll be checking this forum for any feedback you may have.
here's some a link to the some 'Making Of' stuff:
Layouts:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/2259241...7603687958321/
Pencils:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/2259241...7603658013836/
many Thanks,
Alex
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I don't think I'm going to be able to post the images here until the competition is over.
I had nothing to do with the viewer, just managed to get my stuff in the comp.
Cheers for taking the time to reply.
In fact, every company sucks ass when it comes to online comics.
Although, if you go fullscreen Zuda is tolerable. They should just do an in-browser version of CDisplay for stuff like this.
Are you looking for comments or compliments? Because while a lot of the coloring is nice, there's a bunch of perspective/anatomy stuff there that could be talked about.
Either is fine, I know its not perfect.
If you know it's not perfect, start by doing something about it! Ask what can be improved, that is after all, the purpose of the AC.
I don't see the part where he rejected advice.
Page Two- You missed a good opportunity in the last two panels to do something interesting with the dialogue. You could have had it read:
Panel Five: Really Roy, your starting to sound just like my-
Panel Six: -- Mother?!
That way one panel feeds into the next, pulling the reader along in a more fluid fashion. Also, "your" should be "you're." Might want someone to proofread your script in the future.
Page Six- In the bottom panel the Fool's holding his sword in an extremely uncomfortable way. Even if he had his hand upside down like that, his thumb would probably be laying over his index finger, like when you make a fist.
Other than that, no major complaints. One quibble I have is that during the fight between the Fool and the witch, if the Fool had used some of his jester training during the fight, allowing him to defeat the witch through unconventional acrobatics/firebreathing/juggling, then that would have been a link back to the very first page, wrapping the story up in a slightly neater package.
Still, best of luck. The comic shows potential.
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yeah thats what I was saying either is fine.
Page One- That fire-breathing panel looks like you just pasted a photo of fire into that space, and clashes with the look of the rest of the page.
Yeah I was kind of running out of time at that stage, and had to compromise.
Page Two- You missed a good opportunity in the last two panels to do something interesting with the dialogue. You could have had it read:
Panel Five: Really Roy, your starting to sound just like my-
Panel Six: -- Mother?!
Nice, that was kind of what I was going for. But your way is more elegant.
I see that thumb thing, I think I struggled with the angle a bit on thats one.
Yeah someone else said about including some Jester tricks in the fight. I think thats something I'll look at for the future
Other than that, no major complaints. One quibble I have is that during the fight between the Fool and the witch, if the Fool had used some of his jester training during the fight, allowing him to defeat the witch through unconventional acrobatics/firebreathing/juggling, then that would have been a link back to the very first page, wrapping the story up in a slightly neater package.
Still, best of luck. The comic shows potential.
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brill, thanks for taking the time to give me your crit, I appreciate it.