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Finnished this last night. The main duo are now away from their pursuers and decide to settle down for the night and in doing so a new phrase is coined...
Hope you enjoyed But what did you think whilst reading? :?:
The style is pretty cool. Very newspaper comic-ish. I can defintly tell the scenario they are in.
My main suggestion would be either add more frames or cut dialogue. The words seem to overpower the images where they should not. It makes it harder to follow the story and know whats happening.
I did notice you used a couple of interesting angles, but the last half could use more flushing out. Again, I have a hard time reading the action past the first look. I found myself having to look over it a couple times just to read that. I think limiting the dialogue or adding more frames will help that.
Other than that, I think it has a lot of potential. Good job.
this is really cool man, wow this is way cool, but i think, that you should post the previous page, and so forth.
That's difficult as there's 42 pages of backstory before this. Pages that have self contained scenes are rare.
It's all at www.smugglingvacation.co.uk if you have time to give it a look.
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The_Glad_HatterOne Sly FoxUnderneath a Groovy HatRegistered Userregular
edited January 2008
Very Nice. I don't know if it's just my monitor, but you could adjsut your curves/ levels a bit more so that all your black is, in fact, black.
I'm talking about in the black zone between the couple as they're talkin in the car. kinda stripey..
this is really cool man, wow this is way cool, but i think, that you should post the previous page, and so forth.
That's difficult as there's 42 pages of backstory before this. Pages that have self contained scenes are rare.
It's all at www.smugglingvacation.co.uk if you have time to give it a look.
really cool man, i had some time to read the beginning, some parts are kinda confusing(like, is his brother's friend calling the cops?) cause its so fast paced, but you pull it off. i like how the bad guys are not complete cunts and have a cool personality, ill read some more later.
really cool man, i had some time to read the beginning, some parts are kinda confusing(like, is his brother's friend calling the cops?) cause its so fast paced, but you pull it off. i like how the bad guys are not complete cunts and have a cool personality, ill read some more later.
Yeah, early on his mate does call the cops - he's a registered police informant for Customs and Excise.
Very Nice. I don't know if it's just my monitor, but you could adjsut your curves/ levels a bit more so that all your black is, in fact, black.
I'm talking about in the black zone between the couple as they're talkin in the car. kinda stripey..
You single comment has pinpointed the achilles heel here that I wasn't aware enough of. Important as I'm printing this soon. Have since printed off the tiff files onto paper and am making alterations on the blacks on some 45 pages, as you pinpointed.
- As you're from Belgium - can you see readers in Belgium being interested in this strip when I print?O_o
jas on
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The_Glad_HatterOne Sly FoxUnderneath a Groovy HatRegistered Userregular
You single comment has pinpointed the achilles heel here that I wasn't aware enough of. Important as I'm printing this soon. Have since printed off the tiff files onto paper and am making alterations on the blacks on some 45 pages, as you pinpointed.
- As you're from Belgium - can you see readers in Belgium being interested in this strip when I print?O_o
But what did you think whilst reading? :?: 
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My main suggestion would be either add more frames or cut dialogue. The words seem to overpower the images where they should not. It makes it harder to follow the story and know whats happening.
I did notice you used a couple of interesting angles, but the last half could use more flushing out. Again, I have a hard time reading the action past the first look. I found myself having to look over it a couple times just to read that. I think limiting the dialogue or adding more frames will help that.
Other than that, I think it has a lot of potential. Good job.
That's difficult as there's 42 pages of backstory before this. Pages that have self contained scenes are rare.
It's all at www.smugglingvacation.co.uk if you have time to give it a look.
I'm talking about in the black zone between the couple as they're talkin in the car. kinda stripey..
- As you're from Belgium - can you see readers in Belgium being interested in this strip when I print?O_o
Glad to be able to help!
The strip could very well hit off in a european market, the style reminded me of some older comics here (like Petit Spirou http://membres.lycos.fr/bdaucdi/planches_series/petit_spirou.jpg or Kramikske
http://www.dirkstallaert.be/afb/kramikske2.jpg.
But foreign comics usually only sell well here once they're a huge hit in their country of origin i guess.