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Lucy

OmerGOmerG Registered User regular
edited January 2008 in Artist's Corner
Hey all,

this is a concept for on of the main characters in an upcoming comic of mine, called "O; PhX" more information on which will be up on the web at some point in the future... in the mean time though, here's Lucy (pre-shading)

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fire away!

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Set a man on fire and he'll be hot for the rest of his life.

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  • flundraflundra Registered User regular
    edited January 2008
    Her left arm & hand look small-ish. Also, her right shin looks a lot more buff than her left one. Well actually looking at it more carefully I'm not quite sure of that anymore, that's just what first caught my eye. Otherwise the anatomy looks pretty solid, love the wings.

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  • RankenphileRankenphile Passersby were amazed by the unusually large amounts of blood.Registered User, Moderator Mod Emeritus
    edited January 2008
    your inkwork could use a lot of attention. You're using pretty uniform line weight, all very thin, which gives a very flat appearance. Using more dynamic lines could really help direct the eye and add a lot of vibrance and life to the picture.

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  • ScosglenScosglen Registered User regular
    edited January 2008
    Her calf muscles are flaring out way too much for how large her legs are.

    There's also a small tangent between the bag and her leg.

    Something about how her hair is going behind the wing is really bothering me. Either the hair should go in front of the wing or the contour should be redrawn so the shape of the tied off bit isn't so dagger-like.

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  • NakedZerglingNakedZergling A more apocalyptic post apocalypse Portland OregonRegistered User regular
    edited January 2008
    those calfs are like chun li's thighs

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  • OmerGOmerG Registered User regular
    edited January 2008
    ok, so main issue seems to be the calfs.

    right on.

    as for he lines being uniform, i agree wholeheartedly, but i dont do the coloring for these, and the colorist (and co creator) has very specific requests.

    seeing as i really dig the way they come out post coloring i oblige...

    thanks for the input though.

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    Build a man a fire and he'll be hot for a day;
    Set a man on fire and he'll be hot for the rest of his life.

    Check out Ned the Chainsaw Guy. He's a cool cat.
  • ShiboeShiboe Registered User regular
    edited January 2008
    There are quite a few things that look wrong, aside from those already said. A lot of your lines seem like you have a vague understanding of what the muscles are doing, but are not quite getting how to express it. Where the near arm connects to her chest for example, there are two horizontal lines which would indicate a "pit" but the lower connects to the pec/breast... Try drawing a skull that would fit in that head. The breasts are overly skewed for perspective, the neck is too long, collarbone is wonky, there's a weird bump on her thumb, etc.

    I think it's cool that you gave an honest effort to do some perspective, but it could use a more solid foundation of the characters anatomy. The weapon is solid.

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  • The_Glad_HatterThe_Glad_Hatter One Sly Fox Underneath a Groovy HatRegistered User regular
    edited January 2008
    Not bad, the posters above nailed the crits.

    But i was just wondering, am i the only one kinda tired of the lil' thong/underwear lines showing up everywere? (on the hips, that is).
    I guess most of us are guys, and we can alle appreciate a stylish whaletale, but are they being overdone? or is it just a pet peeve of mine?

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  • OmerGOmerG Registered User regular
    edited January 2008
    The_Glad_Hatter wrote: »
    Not bad, the posters above nailed the crits.

    But i was just wondering, am i the only one kinda tired of the lil' thong/underwear lines showing up everywere? (on the hips, that is).
    I guess most of us are guys, and we can alle appreciate a stylish whaletale, but are they being overdone? or is it just a pet peeve of mine?

    I could take it or leave it.

    but i thought it would work for her outfit so i snuck it in ;)

    Shiboe - while I appreciate the critique, I'm not sure I agree with most of it... I know alot of my curves and musculature (sp?) can be exaggerated... but I do that with the intention to express more motion. Now I know classicly speaking anatomy is going to be picked at, but I just don't put as much stuck in which bone goes where if the overall feel is good.

    Again though, thanks for the input. It was duely noted and will be taken into account :)

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    Build a man a fire and he'll be hot for a day;
    Set a man on fire and he'll be hot for the rest of his life.

    Check out Ned the Chainsaw Guy. He's a cool cat.
  • HeartlashHeartlash Registered User regular
    edited January 2008
    OmerG wrote: »
    The_Glad_Hatter wrote: »
    Not bad, the posters above nailed the crits.

    But i was just wondering, am i the only one kinda tired of the lil' thong/underwear lines showing up everywere? (on the hips, that is).
    I guess most of us are guys, and we can alle appreciate a stylish whaletale, but are they being overdone? or is it just a pet peeve of mine?

    I could take it or leave it.

    but i thought it would work for her outfit so i snuck it in ;)

    Shiboe - while I appreciate the critique, I'm not sure I agree with most of it... I know alot of my curves and musculature (sp?) can be exaggerated... but I do that with the intention to express more motion. Now I know classicly speaking anatomy is going to be picked at, but I just don't put as much stuck in which bone goes where if the overall feel is good.

    Again though, thanks for the input. It was duely noted and will be taken into account :)

    You should definitely take what he says about the head into account. Even from a stylistic standpoint, the cheek looks so large compared to the cranium that it just feels a bit off.

    I appreciate that this peice has a very high difficultly level. I think many of the things suggested thus far are small tweaks that will take it from good to great.

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  • OmerGOmerG Registered User regular
    edited January 2008
    Oh yeah don't get me wrong, I came for critique and I'll definetly take care of the issues that were raised, i was responding to just several things that I didn't agree with specifically but still. :)

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    Build a man a fire and he'll be hot for a day;
    Set a man on fire and he'll be hot for the rest of his life.

    Check out Ned the Chainsaw Guy. He's a cool cat.
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