Dangerously Casual - Feedback

Hopper

Hey guys, I was just looking for some feedback for a comic strip I've been working on for a while. Mind you, I'm an amateur at this whole Wacom thing and have never taken an art class so don't murder me.

I'd simply like some comments regarding where to expand on the sketchy art style, and what you think of the writing/delivery. This is one of my newest.




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Kirk

It isn't funny and the art isn't very good.

MKR

What really stands out to me is the lack of variation in line width, and the fact that all the lines are super-thick.

This tutorial might be helpful.

Edit: And the writing seems entirely random. This thread might be a good read for you.

The_Glad_Hatter

I do like the idea for the comic on voting.

apart from the change in inking (adding some dynamics) i'd also try to change the speech bubbles and the grey white background. it runs over the doors in the voting comic, which is weird.

What software are you using to do these?

Mykonos

i think u need to flip the middle strip horizontaly to make it seem like the terrorist is running away from them, vice torwards them.

Greatnation

I acutally think they are pretty cool. The one you posted here seems especially funny. Art can be cleaned up alot though, so keep practicing. General rule of thumb is, becoming a better artist in general will help your cartooning alot, so keep a sketchbook and constantly draw from life.

MKR

It didn't seem funny at all to me, but I think my brain instinctively goes "blah" to political jokes nowadays. The content isn't particularly original, but it could probably be saved with better delivery.

Hopper

Thanks for the feedback...

The super-solid lines are on purpose, but if it looks that bad I might stay away from it.

I'm using an Intuos3 with photoshop 7.

The_Glad_Hatter

there's nothing wrong with super-solid lines neccesarily, but right now the lines are kinda plain. You can keep the solid lines, just try to make them more interesting is my advice. varying thickness to get a "brushy" fee, or using various thicknesses to make some parts stand out more than others.

DVG

The navigation on your site could use some work. There's no easy way to link someone directly to a specific comic, for instance, since it's using Ajax (for the sake of Ajax, apparently) to load the new image in place of the old.

Kamikaze Purple

Hopper wrote: »

The super-solid lines are on purpose, but if it looks that bad I might stay away from it.

It's not that it necessarily looks "bad," but I think it definitely needs to be polished. It's very sketchy and the thickness of the lines just makes you seem like you're having trouble keeping them smooth, not like an actual technique. If that's the look you want, like I said, just work towards polishing it.

srsizzy

Yeah, the art isn't too hot, but I actually read most of the comics because I found the jokes funny, at least funnier than a lot of web comics out there (made me chuckle more than CAD has in about a year).