I've lurked for awhile and figured I'd upload something recently finished. Give me all your thoughts and crits on style, content, whatever. I don't have any huge aspirations of creating a webcomic, but thought it would be fun:
You guys are definitely right, the joke in my mind never really got past the point of "I picture Maverick would be pissed at McCain's new moniker." Gotta work on the joke overall. I definitely cheated by keeping most of the line work for Goose and Mav in each panel, I redrew McCain mostly.
and having thumbs up dickhead in panel 3 only, getting rid of the 'fuck off' entirely
I second this.
The puchline of the joke is the gesture in panel 2. The fuck off part is really not necessary and actually takes the joke in a direction where the audience kinda wonders if theres something more going on that they cant figure out.
It also allows for characters to moce a little ... because when goose talks in panel 2 you can have him turn his head towards mavrick and then turn back in panel 3. This will help eliminate the static feel to the art and increase the interaction between the characters in the strip.
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In summary: Write better punchlines and redraw each panel.
Anyway, I do love the character design, and the disenchanted look on "original maverick"'s face
'So who is this guy?' in panel 1
'says he's the original maverick' in panel 2
and having thumbs up dickhead in panel 3 only, getting rid of the 'fuck off' entirely
I agree. The style is cool, but redraw each frame, maybe experimenting with angles. Would add so much more interest.
I agree with Jake!
I second this.
The puchline of the joke is the gesture in panel 2. The fuck off part is really not necessary and actually takes the joke in a direction where the audience kinda wonders if theres something more going on that they cant figure out.
It also allows for characters to moce a little ... because when goose talks in panel 2 you can have him turn his head towards mavrick and then turn back in panel 3. This will help eliminate the static feel to the art and increase the interaction between the characters in the strip.