My new web comic
vix
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Hey, I just began posting my web comic online. Its a science fiction comedy done in the form of daily newspaper strips. I'm posting a few of them on here, but you can see more at my webpage www.wormholeparasites.com Any feedback you can give me would be GREATLY appreciated. Thank you!
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Also, just looked at your website. I hope you plan on doing colour versions of your comic, like in your 'Characters' link.
my one crit is that each one looks very bland and blank, if you plan on keeping it black and white only, some variation in the linework would go a long way (thicker lines, thinner lines).
also the border makes it look very stark, not sure what you could do to change that, but the bit blocks of white behind the mostly white panels makes it look rather boring to the eyes, maybe try setting the panels on a different color/value of greyscale
edit- also is that comic sans? might want to avoid comic sans (anyone have a link to that font website?)
i think the one you're thinking of is blambot.
I do like the fact that you change perspective every now and again, so keep that going
NSFW, and I hate embedding Youtube videos.
The artwork there is, even in just black and while line work, much better thent he artwork in the strips you posted. If you are going to continue doing strips Id recomend taking the time to make the characters as well rendered as the ones on your character page. No this does not mean color your strip. But the linework is just much more solid and the characters are much better drawn in the character page then in the strip.
Just a note on the web site ... if youre trying to build an audience Id do away with the "enter" page to your website. It looks cool but its only going to irritate people that are comming there every day looking for new strips. Generally with web comics you want the comic to be the first thing they see when your site loads.
People like Penny Arcade can get away with making people click the comic link to get the comic because they are well esablished now and because their blog is as much a part of the comic as the comic is, but in general and for people starting out the approach Kurtz takes at pvponline.com is going to make your comic and site more accessable to new readers.
As for the comics themselves I think you have an interesting idea, and your writing is pretty clean, but Id challenge you to ask yourself why you chose the title and the types of characters you chose and try to make that more a part of the comics.
At the moment many of the strips could be of any kind of creature in any kind of sci fi setting. What makes yours unique? and us that answer to grab people and show them a new universe of ideas. It will make your comic stand out and not appear like a sci fi for sci fis sake kind of comic.
To see the new banner and some more updated comics, please check out www.wormholeparasites.com
here's one of the new comics with some added tones. I plan to start changing the font as well. Tomorrow is also when I'm going to add the first longer, full color Sunday comic, too. Please let me know what you think!
The last panel my work better with the human having a very worried tearful face and the alien saying "what?" instead. It may not though either, but I think it is something people should always take note of when structuring.
But really, it is good, the art is quite nice, the dialogue isn't awful, though you may need to careful about ending it on anything other than the punchline, as something else after can soften it. People will be ready to laugh, but reading just those extra couple of words is when they should be grinning stupidly, and by the time they have finished the extra sentence the feeling is gone.
When your comic title and author credit are darker than the speech text and linework you have problems. It looks faded and unprofessional.
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That sure is a whole lot of flat color with gradients applied over the top of them. Yes Sir..
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You mean cell shading. Yeah either cell shade or use flat colours, gradients look amateur. Also watch your colours, the fluro green grass is awfully straining on the eyes.
i'd suggest trying a few different things, sit down and really think about it and draw out a bunch of alternatives, you might come up with something you like more
So it's time for me to post my second Sunday comic, and I've made some of the suggested changes given after the first one. For starters, I've used the pen tool for the line art in this one to make them look crisper. Second, Ive used the gradients more sparingly, and the characters are no longer colored using gradients at all. I'm still working on a new design for the title, so for now its remained the same as before. Any other suggestions you have would be great. Thanks again!
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And i'd like to see more of the restaurant...
the "mission statement" on your website clearly states you're ambitious; show us
When someone is talking about how awesome something is, the reader would love to join in on the fun. Perhaps reveal some more detail on the room in the background, or use a little perspective to show more of the restaurant?