The new forums will be named Coin Return (based on the most recent vote)! You can check on the status and timeline of the transition to the new forums here.
The Guiding Principles and New Rules document is now in effect.
Re: Dave's art dump (Big ol' dump on the 5th page) (not a poop dump)
acadia
Registered User regular
Registered User regular
Afternoon, PA:AC. My name's Dave, long time lurker, few times poster.
I make a comic called Applied Living (along with one of my buddies, who writes it) that updates Mondays and Fridays. It's been going for almost a year and a half now and I'm getting to the point where I'm comfortable with showing it around and getting some (hopefully honest) advice concerning it.
We recently started somewhat of an experiment with our comic -- no dialogue. It's just for this particular story arc, but I feel it showcases my artwork more so I'll use these as the sample comics to show you guys.
Page 1
Page 2
Page 3
Page 4
I'd love any feedback possible, on the art, writing, site layout, anything!
Thanks for reading!
I make a comic called Applied Living (along with one of my buddies, who writes it) that updates Mondays and Fridays. It's been going for almost a year and a half now and I'm getting to the point where I'm comfortable with showing it around and getting some (hopefully honest) advice concerning it.
We recently started somewhat of an experiment with our comic -- no dialogue. It's just for this particular story arc, but I feel it showcases my artwork more so I'll use these as the sample comics to show you guys.
Page 1
Page 2
Page 3
Page 4
I'd love any feedback possible, on the art, writing, site layout, anything!
Thanks for reading!
acadia on
0
Posts
Was the lack of dialogue a concious choice?
Well normally our comic is quite wordy (i have an intellectual for a writer, go figure), so I guess he wanted to try and get his 'message' across without words. We're seeing how that goes, and I'm jumping at the opportunity to improve my art.
http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dgxwmhn6_141c23p56c6
Thanks, Allan. Your stuff blows me away constantly, so that means alot coming from you
Thanks! I actually have to focus on giving bright colors, incidentally. I used to use really bland, boring colors for some reason. Bright colors are so much more interesting to look at.
it feels like something that i personally went through
he's working a shitty restaurant job that makes him miserable, he makes next to nothing, the ladder is symbolic of him trying to get out of it, but he's being held down/holding himself back
and then he sees a publishing house, which is linked to what he aspires to be (writer?) and just looks away because it seems like an unattainable dream
am i close? cause that's what i got from it and i think it was nicely done.
That's exactly it. Glad you enjoy it so far! (Holy shit, beavotron responded) Thanks a ton!
This one's called 'Id'. I it write myself and it's more of a 'journal comic' than the other one. No metaphors for living, no roundabout thoughts and ideas, just whatever I'm thinking about at the time. Here's some samples:
Street Preachers
The Spot
Farts make me lol
He is strikingly handsome, despite the abundance of flatulence!
Just kidding! I'm five.
i saw some shitty horror movie once about a farm house that was full of the ghosts of this family that had been murdered by their dad
they were haunting people, and the mom ghost kept appearing through this weird splotch on the wall
and you could see the baby boy's ghost feet through the ceiling
anyways, it scared me a lot, and now when i see spots on the ceiling or wall, i can't sleep in those rooms out of fear of ghosts.
Take solace in the fact that it is all Hollywood
they hire real ghosts, just to scare me
Beav: Tentacles =/= ghosts. You'll be fine
that is wonderful
I feel, though, that I'm having a lot of trouble with pacing. I guess it's not an instinctual thing for me, and I really need to work on it. Any tips from the peanut gallery?
I was all excited to come here and be all oh hey man are you the Id guy. And then you go and blow the surprise before i got the chance.
man.
Yep! That's me! I've been doing Id for almost as long as I've been doing ApL. Glad you're checkin out the site, man.
Sometimes, though, it's the addition of a panel that makes a comic funny. I don't think just cutting down things adds to the humor. I guess it's just on a case-by-case basis and it's something I need to get accustomed to.
Anyway, new arts to throw on the pile:
I've been toying with a style of portraiture that's really appealing to me lately. Multiple photo ref's, two colors only (white and whatever color i choose), no shading or anything.
edit: Despoilered. It's my art thread, who the fuck cares.
Allan: Thanks man. You're probably referring to the lips, which are my favorite part of that drawing as well.
New Applied Living page. Not totally happy with it, but I think it gets the message across.
and a new Id.
Pirates, amirite?
This is the current progress on my PA Fanart Contest entry.
Why do the hands look so shitty?
I'd think he'd be rolling his eyes or something...
Those portraitures are blowing my mind. I love them -very stark.
www.atomic-robo.com
I wanted to try to isolate the focus on Gabe and Tycho enjoying a DnD session. Would it be more beneficial to just take out the things in the corners, or blur them to the point at which theyre not recognizable? Or should I try to expand the angle and include the other players?
Well recently Gabe's been more accepting of the whole DnD thing. He DM'd his own group, afterall. I figured he now knows where Tycho is coming from and appreciates his enthusiasm. I know it would be more 'in character' for him to be exasperated, but I wanted this to be as relevant as possible (thanks to canon). Bad idea?
Woah holy shit. I am starstruck. I remember reading the first trade paperback of Atomic Robo (got it and being like 'I wish I could draw like THIS guy'. So, just know that you're speaking to a fan. Thanks for the kudos man, it made my day
New arts (strips) for anyone who cares:
(I guess I'm treating Id as my sketchbook/journal now)
But whatever i guess.
PS: I like your webcomic.
PSS: You stole that had joke from Beartato and Reginald.
(I did not steal it)
(Thanks for liking my comic
...so.
Thanks man! The difference between 'cute' and 'manly awesome' is negligible to me, so long as you like the art. I appreciate it!
--
So, I've had Id critiqued a few other times, and one of the main 'complaints' it got was the font. I tried making my own font out of my own handwriting:
But recently I've been trying to actually write my text in, in an attempt to be more personal.
Good idea?
Bad idea?
Awesome, thanks.
Thanks, man. I kept having to tweak the index finger because it just looked like a second thumb for a while.
Gladly.