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Mother Earth's The S#*T!!!
pyaranderson
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This is my new Web Comic: rockthetoilet.org. I'm a huge penny-arcade fan and excited about adopting some of the conventions of the penny-arcade format. The site's about Chip and Alison as they try to make their lives more "green" while still maintaining the quality of life that they are accustomed to. Expect some upcoming strips ala Cardboard Tube Samurai called "After the Grid Goes Down" about Chip's post-apocalyptic fantasies. I'm making a lot of changes right now, so any feedback is most welcome.
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Post specific pieces you would like crits on here if you want to post anything.
NNOOOoo...
Yeah, you might want to post the actual comics here cause not to many people are going to hit your link.
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i cant seem to find my way to the jokes
i ...i THINK i like the art style? but in some places it looks like you are king of anatomy.. and in other places it looks like you are drawing football eyes and scribbling over things because you dont fully understand them
this is all very confusing to me
Second, your people are ugly as fuck. Perhaps you intended for them to look ugly, but you must know, that if you're going to be drawing a comic people will be attracted to comics with more attractive figures in them.
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And not as preachy.
...Or self-righteous.
All I see is some type of link.
it's just that the writing is terminally unfunny
tracts
Well I'll be damned. For some reason I thought the title had "track" on it.
and that's funnier than the comic
The medium is inherently beautiful. It does not discriminate the content or the creator. But the audience does and it is not the medium that we try and speak to. Make a choice: be dramatic or be funny. Nothing else is entertaining.
Perhaps the use of a collaborative writer in the form of a - dare I assume - friend could help achieve your intent.
The art is reminiscent of cold porridge. Looks like sick and is hard to swallow. Try using fewer lines. Clean up your scenes and characters. Comics like PA succeed using an iconic and defined art style achieved through extra-realism.
My humble suggestion; sunder the concept and rework the building blocks. Second drafts are never a bad idea.
Sometimes I love you, Tam.
Then I sober up.
This douche chill has gotten too much attention and i bet we never hear from him again.
I mean, I want to be constructive, but I see no humour
We do want to help
but there just doesn't seem to be any joke or anything to take away from so many of the strips.
The bike one isn't too bad, and I remember liking another
But what was that about there being snot on his jumper?
"It is there"
"Oh yes it is"
fin
Not much there
Very very few people have interesting enough lives for that sort of thing
best of luck
If seinfeld were really like that it would have bombed. I dig the pen style, but i feel like these are a personal events...which isn't to say they are bad...it's just that we're not all "in on it" so it just feels.....pointless?