I love the illo & choice of colours, however there's a few things in the narrative that I'm not too sure on...
My first thoughts were that it's a 'piss smell' that's coming off the old guy.
Being told it's a ghost (and spotting the hand), my next thought is that the old guy has died and it's actually quite sad that the two women are completely unaware of this...
The body language of the lady on the left is such that she really does not want anything to do with the pregnant lady (who, as Chrom points out, is really rather preggers considering she already has one very young sprog - I didn't think it was possible to get pregnant while already pregnant?).
Finally, the composition and colour choice lead me to believe there's something significant about the baby.
Actually, after considering that a moment, perhaps it's as simple as: old man dies on bus; couple are unaware but baby can see the ghost as it leaves his body?
You guys know that when a pregnant lady has her baby, she doesn't lose the enormous amount of weight she gained during pregnancy the moment that he's born, right?
It's a beautiful drawing, but I'm also not sure that I would have understood the ghost thing without being told.
I'm with the others on the pee smell/clarity issue. It's a shame because it's a really nice looking drawing, but I can't think of a good fix to the clarity problem without fucking up the composition. I mean, you could change the color of the ghost/baby, but then it would probably just look like "generic smell" than specifically "pee smell", which probably wouldn't be that much of an improvement.
On one hand you could have the dude more blatantly dead, you know, gray skin, head lolled back with X'd out eyes, the "spirit" coming out his mouth or something rather than just originating generally around his body, or you could make the ghost look more identifiably human-like, so it reads as more "it's the ghost of that one dude". The first probably ruins the tone you're going for, and the second I'm not sure if you have enough space in there to fit it in, so I dunno what to tell ya.
I guess just keep in mind for future reference that subtlety is not always going to be your friend.
Someone voiced that they think it's a good thing that people first mistake it for a pee smell
like "oh that's just a stanky ass homless man" then upon reading it realizing he's actually dead..sort of like a comment on how easily we disregard the homeless and their problems
not at all anticipated or planned by me, but it's interesting nonetheless
I'm going to mess around with this more
natri: making it silver would make it all monochrome which would really take the punch away from it. I like the idea of giving it more pronounced human features though, that's a neat one.
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Someone voiced that they think it's a good thing that people first mistake it for a pee smell
like "oh that's just a stanky ass homless man" then upon reading it realizing he's actually dead..sort of like a comment on how easily we disregard the homeless and their problems
not at all anticipated or planned by me, but it's interesting nonetheless
You could possibly fade his legs into to slightest bit of transparency so that the top of him has the same weight, but as you look over him he starts to taper off.
You have a lot of hard edged small pattern going on in this. The value structure is pretty solid so it does not bother me much but maybe calm the water down. Eliminating pattern anywhere else would detract more than help.
i keep seeing things in the driftwood
like an elephant! and the negative space sort of looks like the head and beak of a bird.
Is it in sand or foamy water?
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uh oh, does it looks like foamy water? how can i fix this...?
The sand looks like its its own form breaking up in the air, like little foam bubbles, but sand makes smooth horizons or little clumps, it doesn't usually perforate itself. If its supposed to be clumping on the log, maybe it should conform to the form a bit more, It looks fine on the base but the front sticks bumps in the sand look like foam sitting in front of it. With the back line of the sand, Ocean foam does that, which is why I thought it was foamy water.
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watch out it's a BUS GHOST
BUS GHOST!
You're damn right.
really rather mellow,
his ticker went to toast,
so now they call him Bus Ghost!
Oh Fran, get off my bus with your kooky laugh!
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In my head I sang that until I couldn't figure out how it'd sound compared to the rest.
Bus ghost!
My first thoughts were that it's a 'piss smell' that's coming off the old guy.
Being told it's a ghost (and spotting the hand), my next thought is that the old guy has died and it's actually quite sad that the two women are completely unaware of this...
The body language of the lady on the left is such that she really does not want anything to do with the pregnant lady (who, as Chrom points out, is really rather preggers considering she already has one very young sprog - I didn't think it was possible to get pregnant while already pregnant?).
Finally, the composition and colour choice lead me to believe there's something significant about the baby.
Actually, after considering that a moment, perhaps it's as simple as: old man dies on bus; couple are unaware but baby can see the ghost as it leaves his body?
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It's a beautiful drawing, but I'm also not sure that I would have understood the ghost thing without being told.
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Didn't notice anything strange about the pregnant mother, probably because womanly ways are so mysterious to me.
On one hand you could have the dude more blatantly dead, you know, gray skin, head lolled back with X'd out eyes, the "spirit" coming out his mouth or something rather than just originating generally around his body, or you could make the ghost look more identifiably human-like, so it reads as more "it's the ghost of that one dude". The first probably ruins the tone you're going for, and the second I'm not sure if you have enough space in there to fit it in, so I dunno what to tell ya.
I guess just keep in mind for future reference that subtlety is not always going to be your friend.
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like "oh that's just a stanky ass homless man" then upon reading it realizing he's actually dead..sort of like a comment on how easily we disregard the homeless and their problems
not at all anticipated or planned by me, but it's interesting nonetheless
I'm going to mess around with this more
natri: making it silver would make it all monochrome which would really take the punch away from it. I like the idea of giving it more pronounced human features though, that's a neat one.
Thanks lovely forum friends!
pfft social consciousness is for dorks.
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Hopefully there's no fart gas in this one, it's a quickie anyways:
HAPPY SHARK WEEK!
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I'm seriously so swamped with work, I got the weekend off from my client and I'm drawing my own stuff like a fiend.
adding color now, thoughts?
also i saved off my process sketch cause i always find them funny. my process drawings are so ridiculously rough:
http://frank05.critter.net/images/Artwork/driftwood3.jpg try just clicking this?
thoughts?
does this one show up? haha
i keep seeing things in the driftwood
like an elephant! and the negative space sort of looks like the head and beak of a bird.
Maybe I'll have to move back to firefox because Chrome is being a jerk today.
I'm kind of partial to the monochrome color scheme of the WIPs, but the muted tones you have are really sweet.
I forget, do you use Photoshop for this kind of work or something else?
thanks fug!
uh oh, does it looks like foamy water? how can i fix this...?
The sand looks like its its own form breaking up in the air, like little foam bubbles, but sand makes smooth horizons or little clumps, it doesn't usually perforate itself. If its supposed to be clumping on the log, maybe it should conform to the form a bit more, It looks fine on the base but the front sticks bumps in the sand look like foam sitting in front of it. With the back line of the sand, Ocean foam does that, which is why I thought it was foamy water.