Long time lurker, long time ago poster.
I figured it time to spoof all the damn cop shows out there. I'm still working on all this (have been working on these designs for awhile), launch in a couple of months, I'll post progress and stuff as I go along. Enjoy.
Candy Beaver, Director of Ops
"Bets" Forensic Scientist
Guy Flaymour, Goon Trainer / House Mom, makes great muffins
Major Dick Powers, Field Director
"Gooch" IT nerd, code monkey, ladies man.
"JJ", Jamal Johnson, Demolitions Expert, aka "The token black guy"
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Once you see it, it cannot be unseen.
These are really fun! Can't wait to see them in action.
The floating cigar amuses me.
I'm even more amused with all the ash he's getting in his coffee.
@Spuds: those boobs... I get it that they're supposed to be huge and stylized but they don't look right on the second panel (her right one goes under her arm?!).
yeah Mayday, they bother me too...couldn't figure it out... I have A TON of work to do on drawing girls...I think I know how to fix it.
Any suggestions on the word balloons? Maybe an example? I guess I could just detach it and move it down a notch.
The ashes into the coffee is a deliberate site gag. Glad you guys like it.
Honestly, if you just google "drawing breasts" and look at the result from donmai.us , that might help you a bit, because all of the errors listed there are things you're doing. (Even though it's anime-styled, the suggestions are still relevant).
Obviously the more you understand real anatomy, the better you'll be able to stylize anatomy in such a way that still looks correct. For the time being though, that reference should help you with the easiest-to-fix problems.
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As an example (not particularly a better ending, but one i would find funnier. but my sense of humor is pretty awful) is to have gooch awkwardly drinking from his beverage and rather guiltily eying jj.
edit: i know this is how things work stylistically in these webcomics (PA/CtrlAltDel/etc), but mouth placement in the corner of the face always seems weird... structurally.. when the head is partially turned it works, but when looking directly at them (or close to it) it starts to weird me out. so panel 2 fine, panel 3 seems off-ish
Damn humor. Hmm, Gooch drinking and looking, just doesn't do it for me in the last panel, and it's not really in Gooch's personality to NOT comment on it, he's kind of a smart ass. I was finding it funny that to Gooch, he didn't relate JJ to the black kid, but yet the Chinese girl. I always thought it a funny esthetic that in text books as a kid, there is a black kid in a wheel chair, a blonde girl, a chinese girl in leg braces, a mexican girl with a lisp (not sure how that's illustrated, maybe that's a better punch). So, to me they really aren't interchangeable, they mean different things.
I think I can pump it up a bit, make the dialogue more sharp. I guess I'm trying to find that line between highly offensive (which I don't want to do for the sake of doing it) and PG-13.
As far as mouth placement, I know what you mean, I guess that's a style choice.
Pretty Great!
It also looks like you're having fun making it, which is always the sign of a great comic.