Antics: unwelcome guests 7/11

Fletcher

Hello AC, how are things with you?

I've been trying to make myself draw at least a comic a week since late last year, and having gotten sick of deviantart i made a website!

But that is beside the point, as what I really want to know is whether you cool cats could please instruct me in the fine art of arting. I know its pretty much a stick figure comic, but I'm hoping others can point out things i need to work on, things I'm missing, things i need to remove entirely, stuff like that.

I've changed style a little bit since the first one (which i hope is noticable because i hate the way the first few look), and I'm trying to force myself to cut down on excess panels. Do you guys think 6-8 panels is reasonable at this size?

Also somebody pointed out recently that the comic was getting into "talking heads" territory, so I'm trying to change things up a little more by throwing in 'props' and changing viewpoints a little. Is it noticable? Any tips on writing 'funny' would also be appreciated!


first (spoilered for your v-scroll)

and the most recent ones (again with the v-scroll)

please put your critiques inside me

Mustang

Reminds me of a less crude version of Polkout.
The writing is great. Granted the drawing is rudimentary, but it does what it needs too so it doesn't matter.
It's all thumbs up from me.

earthwormadam

Fire Hazard is my new hero.

Fletcher

Mustang wrote: »

Reminds me of a less crude version of Polkout.
The writing is great. Granted the drawing is rudimentary, but it does what it needs too so it doesn't matter.
It's all thumbs up from me.

I hadn't seen polkout before, but after reading it that is totally what i was aiming for. Indeed the drawing is rudimentary but i'm glad it works, phew

earthwormadam wrote:

Fire Hazard is my new hero.

inside all of us there is a tiny flame that will never go out (it's your soul)

ManonvonSuperock

I like your six-panel layout. It makes the comics look like single page comics.

What I would prefer is when you have 4 regular panels, and only one panel on the bottom, have that last panel be as wide as the two panels above it, so that each row has a uniform height and width, but they vary in how many panels they're divided into.

Fletcher

oh awesome thats exactly the sort of thing I wanted to know, cheers Manon

i am terrible with layouts, haha

Zombiemambo

For the first time in a long time I laughed at comics posted in the AC.

exit

MYSTERY SOLVED made me unbelievably happy

ManonvonSuperock

Fletch,

Have you read Robot Dreams? Outside of being a totally awesome book, I think the layouts used there will give you some ideas for flexibility within your own comics. She also uses three rows at a uniform width.

Even if you don't buy it, the Amazon reader previews'll give you an idea of it.

t i m

When it comes to making comics you're either funny or you're not...you sir are histarical. Nice work!

JohnTWM

The drawing is rudimentary on the surface, but you the bits where you get a bit more.. complex with your lines are still awesome while managing to stay integrated with the rest of the style. They are also funny, which helps :P

Fletcher

ManonvonSuperock wrote: »

Fletch,

Have you read Robot Dreams? Outside of being a totally awesome book, I think the layouts used there will give you some ideas for flexibility within your own comics. She also uses three rows at a uniform width.

Even if you don't buy it, the Amazon reader previews'll give you an idea of it.

wow that actually looks like something i'd want to own (and learn from)

when i finally have some money that is first on the list, cheers dude

also new comic ehhh:

#pipe

ha ha haaaaa

Fletcher

so yeah here is another comic!

worstcase

i love that last one

ManonvonSuperock

butlers fighting to the death gladiator-style is a very distinct gag. if you really want to pull it off, you'll need more than the dog treats gag to differentiate it from Family Guy.

Fletcher

ManonvonSuperock wrote: »

butlers fighting to the death gladiator-style is a very distinct gag. if you really want to pull it off, you'll need more than the dog treats gag to differentiate it from Family Guy.

seriously?

family guy did butlers fighting to the death?

i don't even watch iiit ah crap

Mustang

It's true they did, it wasn't exactly the same gag, and it was pretty brief, and a long time ago, and to be honest I only thought of it because Manon mentioned it.

ManonvonSuperock

Fletcher wrote: »

ManonvonSuperock wrote: »

butlers fighting to the death gladiator-style is a very distinct gag. if you really want to pull it off, you'll need more than the dog treats gag to differentiate it from Family Guy.

seriously?

family guy did butlers fighting to the death?

i don't even watch iiit ah crap

here it is, if you're curious.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CS1j1hKndOc

Fletcher

cheers manon, ah crap i guess i should google keywords or something to make sure i'm not inadvertantly copying someone in future

oh well, can't change it now (i can but i'm lazy)

onward to more comics!

ManonvonSuperock

onward!

Fletcher

woo another one (crazy i know)

any thoughts on what i should be trying to work on/introduce?

beavotron

this newest one is my fav.

D-Robe

I like these way more than I should. They are like a perfect mix of Polk Out and (original, non-crappy)Cy&H.

Badsalt

So I just read all those comics. I like most of the ones that are out there. Sky whales was entertaining, the Butler gag was done with Stewie but, how can a fight to the death NOT be funny? Mainly I just like the back and forth. The whole comic seems kind of like Cyanide and Happiness. Which I loved at first, and have slowly started to hate. Especially when they do flash videos...

#pipe

One of the butlers should have a net and trident

there's always a gladiator with a net and trident for some reason

Fletcher

haha awesome, i was going to give one of them a net!

but i couldn't be bothered drawing a net

Badsalt

Yeah, it seems like drawing a net and a trident would just be alot of extra work.

Fletcher

so i didn't update at all for a week because i was doing this thing

yes, this thing right here

for the SE++ forum battle

but heres a new comic because i am not a quitter

Stupid Mr Whoopsie Name

I don't know how you manage to make drawings that are so simple seem so expressive, but that Forum Battle entry is fantastic! :^:

Robcham

Fletcher you racist
stop killing the brown guy

Mustang

Ahh fletch, your thread is fast becoming one of the most hilarious on the AC.

Fletcher

Robcham wrote: »

Fletcher you racist
stop killing the brown guy

i actually planned this with the characters switched around for once :P

but then i remembered that i'm a horrible horrible racist

thanks mars and mustang! yay compliments

Food

Your comic is funny! Keep it up!

ManonvonSuperock

you got my vote in the forum battle. the way you jump head first and sideways off the building made it.

also, coincidence or intentional reference to the ass-assassin story from SE a few months back?

Fletcher

so i made another video thing for the SE++ forum battle

here it is

i need to start forcing myself to do comics according to schedule; it is too easy to fall behind

Stupid Mr Whoopsie Name

Fletcher, your shit makes me laugh without fail. I think it would take a lot for me to tire looking at your stuff.

Also

OMG GOOF! His tie disappeared! :P

Fletcher

thanks mars!

i knooow i hate the disappearing tie so much

i'd fix it, but it took three hours of constantly retrying to make windows movie maker even save the file

i'm not putting myself through that again

Mustang

Haha great Fletch, we should totally hook up and give each other STD's.

Fletcher

trade you my chlamydia for your charizard?

The Black Hunter

That round one forum battle was beautiful

the music was the perfect choice